See, for you I read the established relationship fic. Because, for us you write it.
This was really nice -- you have such a gift for injecting a feeling of realism, a concreteness, without breaking the belief in the story. And you always put in these touches that I'm not expecting, that come from somewhere other than the Big Library of Fic Clippings, but that fit right in, expanding things. Like this bit:
Behind them, the other deputy marshal who'd stuck around, Ally-something, was flirting with Deputy Johnson, who was, the last Jim had checked, married with a newborn. Jim craned his head past Sandburg and gave Johnson a not-so-subtle glare.
I really liked this part: I don't think I've seen the argument before, but it's so logical, and so well-stated.
No, the press might have been convinced, but sticking around would have meant working without Blair. That much Jim had figured out from all the whispers he'd overheard after Sandburg got his badge and they started working together as partners.
Either Jim was a freak, or Sandburg was a liar. There was no path in between.
And now: I'm impressed that you created an emotional context that leads naturally to the following remark: I am so excited for them to have the rough sex! Yay!
"Fuck me good," he said, and hooked Blair's hips with his ankles to pull him in.
Jim's such a poet sometimes. Num!
And I completely believe he would call Blair bright-eyes. In fact, I now believe he does it on the show.
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This was really nice -- you have such a gift for injecting a feeling of realism, a concreteness, without breaking the belief in the story. And you always put in these touches that I'm not expecting, that come from somewhere other than the Big Library of Fic Clippings, but that fit right in, expanding things. Like this bit:
Behind them, the other deputy marshal who'd stuck around, Ally-something, was flirting with Deputy Johnson, who was, the last Jim had checked, married with a newborn. Jim craned his head past Sandburg and gave Johnson a not-so-subtle glare.
I really liked this part: I don't think I've seen the argument before, but it's so logical, and so well-stated.
No, the press might have been convinced, but sticking around would have meant working without Blair. That much Jim had figured out from all the whispers he'd overheard after Sandburg got his badge and they started working together as partners.
Either Jim was a freak, or Sandburg was a liar. There was no path in between.
And now: I'm impressed that you created an emotional context that leads naturally to the following remark: I am so excited for them to have the rough sex! Yay!
"Fuck me good," he said, and hooked Blair's hips with his ankles to pull him in.
Jim's such a poet sometimes. Num!
And I completely believe he would call Blair bright-eyes. In fact, I now believe he does it on the show.